Saturday, October 6, 2012

The Cluttered Room

Cluttered mind in turmoil
Scattered thoughts and fears
And regrets over love,
Lost and gained
And, like a room,
Full, with relics and memories
It must give way
To love, compassion and peace
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I wrote this for the Trifextra Week 36 Writing Challenge where we were required to write a composition using a metaphor or simile inspired by one of several photographs. 

Your comments are appreciated.








20 comments:

  1. Cluttered...scattered...regrets. really powerful words. Good job! Reminded me of the movie "A Beautiful Mind"

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    1. Thanks Andrea. Yeah, the picture reminded me of that movie too.

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  2. I would love to get in there and see what all of those say and draw some meaning from it. I love your idea.

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    1. Thank you Kenya. I blew the picture up on my i phone and could read some of the pieces of paper. It's an interesting collection of stuff.

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  3. Hey! You picked the same picture I did. Us cluttered minds think alike! Wow. This is a thoughtful and thought provoking 33 words!

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  4. Thank you Linda. For sure, my mind is cluttered ;)

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  5. What an interpretation. And what perfect words to put it in writing.

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    1. Ruby, thank you for your kind words.

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  6. I love particularly the first two lines. They set up the rest of it beautifully. Nice work indeed.

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  7. Thank you Stephanie. I appreciate those comments.

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  8. Your words seemed to fit the picture perfectly--because really, don't most of our minds look like that? Except with more of those post-it notes.

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    1. Thank you Tina. I agree. Problem is, I lose the post-it's that are in my head!

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  9. i love how you took this prompt into a poem. it makes all those thoughts and feelings tangible.

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    1. Thank you Renada. All those thoughts came to me as soon as I looked at the photo.

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  10. Not to be redundant but I'm going to be just that.... Yes! Cluttered minds look and feel like this especially over love, lost and gained. And our mind's room is filled with such things.

    This makes me sad and happy all at once. Peace (of mind), for me, is priceless! Beautifully done, lumdog!

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    1. Thank you so much Gina. You really hit the nail on the head. If I had a few more words to work with, I would have written pretty much what you said.

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  11. Well done. Great idea to blow up the photo to see the papers. I am very curious to see what that is about!

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  12. well filled words for a well filled room (RogRites)

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