Friday, October 19, 2012

The Hard Truth About Wishes



Sometimes, when wishes come true,
we don’t accept the challenges
that go with our good fortune

Love must be nurtured to survive
Happiness is hard to recognize  
Wealth breeds envy, but fuck ‘em
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I wrote this for Trifextra Week 38 where we are required to write a 33 word composition about the high cost of some wishes when they come true.

Your comments are appreciated.

36 comments:

  1. Yes it must; sometimes it is; I try to stay out of the grips of the other one but it's certainly nice to not have the worry. I giggled at the end. Your f-bombs always sneak up on me. Very entertaining and clever, lumdog.

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    1. Thanks Gina. I'm glad you giggled. I had fun with this one.

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  2. Ha! it started all philosophical...didn't expect that ending :) Some people will just be green (with envy).

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  3. the swearing works well... nice answer to the prompt

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    1. Steven, my reply to your comment is right below FKC's. I somehow spaced out on that one! :/

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  4. Always a fan of profanity. Works well in the otherwise flowery writing.

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    1. Thank you Steven. Glad you liked the mixture.

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    2. Thanks FKC. I'm
      Also a fan! :)

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    1. Thank you Donna. I wrote the ending first and built the rest around it.

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  6. I am still wishing for enough wealth to breed even just a little envy! hehe. Great job on the post.

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    1. Thanks Bo. That would be the optimal level of wealth.

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  7. "Wealth breeds envy, but fuck 'em!" is a great line. I would have wished for some "fuck 'em" money of my own but now, after this goddamn Monkey Paw story, I not so sure I want to make that wish anymore. Still loved your story, though. :)

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    1. I'm glad it was a surprise! I was hesitant because I did a surprise ending last week, but it just hit me as the right thing, Si I did it anyway.

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  9. I loved the advice in the beginning and how you managed to turn the wishes into action/consequence pieces. Very smart.

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    1. Thanks Karen. I was happy that I could come up with some real "truisms" before the surprise.

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  10. I like the juxposition of philosophy with carefree humor. Good work, lum

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  11. Looks like wealth breeds arrogance too ;) Awesome!

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    1. Arrogance or the wherewithal to not worry about what envious people think. Thanks Draug.

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  12. Wonderfully astute, and funny, too!

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    1. Thank you Tina. That means a lot coming from you.

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  13. Indeed. Well, said lumdog, as always. I enjoyed this.

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    1. Thank you Sephanid. I always enjoy your stuff too!

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  14. Absolutely agreed. Well put. (RogRites)

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  15. You made me smile. Which is always appreciated. Nice job, LD.

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