Friday, October 19, 2012

The Hard Truth About Wishes



Sometimes, when wishes come true,
we don’t accept the challenges
that go with our good fortune

Love must be nurtured to survive
Happiness is hard to recognize  
Wealth breeds envy, but fuck ‘em
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I wrote this for Trifextra Week 38 where we are required to write a 33 word composition about the high cost of some wishes when they come true.

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36 comments:

  1. GinaOctober 19, 2012 at 1:14 PM

    Yes it must; sometimes it is; I try to stay out of the grips of the other one but it's certainly nice to not have the worry. I giggled at the end. Your f-bombs always sneak up on me. Very entertaining and clever, lumdog.

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    1. lumdog2012October 20, 2012 at 6:31 AM

      Thanks Gina. I'm glad you giggled. I had fun with this one.

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  2. AnonymousOctober 19, 2012 at 2:04 PM

    Ha! it started all philosophical...didn't expect that ending :) Some people will just be green (with envy).

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  3. AnonymousOctober 19, 2012 at 10:38 PM

    the swearing works well... nice answer to the prompt

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    1. lumdog2012October 20, 2012 at 3:17 PM

      Steven, my reply to your comment is right below FKC's. I somehow spaced out on that one! :/

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  4. Faith CohenOctober 20, 2012 at 1:21 AM

    Always a fan of profanity. Works well in the otherwise flowery writing.

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  5. dkOctober 20, 2012 at 5:43 AM

    Super ending.
    dk

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    1. lumdog2012October 20, 2012 at 6:33 AM

      Thank you Donna. I wrote the ending first and built the rest around it.

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  6. BoOctober 20, 2012 at 1:15 PM

    I am still wishing for enough wealth to breed even just a little envy! hehe. Great job on the post.

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    1. lumdog2012October 20, 2012 at 1:55 PM

      Thanks Bo. That would be the optimal level of wealth.

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  7. Thomas Charles MacInnesOctober 20, 2012 at 4:49 PM

    "Wealth breeds envy, but fuck 'em!" is a great line. I would have wished for some "fuck 'em" money of my own but now, after this goddamn Monkey Paw story, I not so sure I want to make that wish anymore. Still loved your story, though. :)

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  8. UnknownOctober 20, 2012 at 5:49 PM

    I didn't see that coming. LOL!

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    1. lumdog2012October 21, 2012 at 4:24 AM

      I'm glad it was a surprise! I was hesitant because I did a surprise ending last week, but it just hit me as the right thing, Si I did it anyway.

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    2. lumdog2012October 21, 2012 at 4:26 AM

      And thank you Zoe.

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  9. karenOctober 20, 2012 at 6:58 PM

    I loved the advice in the beginning and how you managed to turn the wishes into action/consequence pieces. Very smart.

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    1. lumdog2012October 21, 2012 at 4:29 AM

      Thanks Karen. I was happy that I could come up with some real "truisms" before the surprise.

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  10. kymmOctober 20, 2012 at 7:25 PM

    "Fuck 'em" indeed!

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  11. AnonymousOctober 20, 2012 at 7:47 PM

    I like the juxposition of philosophy with carefree humor. Good work, lum

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  12. DraugOctober 21, 2012 at 9:36 AM

    Looks like wealth breeds arrogance too ;) Awesome!

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    1. lumdog2012October 21, 2012 at 5:58 PM

      Arrogance or the wherewithal to not worry about what envious people think. Thanks Draug.

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  13. TMWHickmanOctober 21, 2012 at 10:53 AM

    Wonderfully astute, and funny, too!

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    1. lumdog2012October 21, 2012 at 5:59 PM

      Thank you Tina. That means a lot coming from you.

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  14. StephOctober 21, 2012 at 12:28 PM

    Indeed. Well, said lumdog, as always. I enjoyed this.

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  15. BetaRulesOctober 21, 2012 at 2:45 PM

    Absolutely agreed. Well put. (RogRites)

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  16. AnonymousOctober 21, 2012 at 5:52 PM

    love this! the ending is terrific!

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  17. lumdog2012October 21, 2012 at 6:09 PM

    Thank you so much Estelle.

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  18. AnonymousOctober 25, 2012 at 9:00 PM

    You made me smile. Which is always appreciated. Nice job, LD.

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