Friday, August 24, 2012

Bad Day at the Bar


Harry penguined his way to the bar and honked: “Tequila, leave the worm!”  The bartender says, “Hey, I don’t like your attitude and you walk funny. You’re on thin ice around here, buddy.”
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I wrote this for Trifextra Week 30 Writing Challenge, where we are supposed to write a 33 word composition using the name of an animal as a verb.

Your comments are welcome.


47 comments:

  1. Oh this is very funny. I think you did very well with the prompt. :-)

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  2. Coming from someone that has tended bar, I can visualize how he's walking to the bar. Good choice of verb!

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    1. Thanks Jeanna. Nothing worse than having to make drinks for a penguin with an attitude!

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  3. "Tequila. Hold the worm." for me. This reads like a great joke. Very clever and funny. Loved the "thin ice." and who doesn't love a bar hopping penguin? I was going to do a goose.

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    1. Thanks Gina. I loved doing this one. Yea, I was thinking about those old jokes where "the elephant walks into a bar...".

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  4. hahaha...wish you had a few more words to figure out a way to use slide away

    awesome

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    1. Yea, it would have been another 33 words to work the polar bear into this! Thanks.

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  5. Ha! I love that you used penguin as the verb.

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    1. Thanks. I enjoyed deciding which animal to write about!

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    1. Thanks. Yea, he's got to reach for that tequila!

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  7. Hahahha! This was a good one. It reminds me of the kinds of jokes my uncle would tell at Thanksgiving dinners :)

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    1. Yea, I was reminded of my dad telling those jokes. Usually off color ;) Thanks for your comments Janna.

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  8. Using "penguin" was brill. I can absolutely see the toddling drunk! Peace, Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/08/24/two-for-trifecta-animals-as-verbs/

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    1. Thanks Amy. I was working with the drunk angle but word limit skunked me. Did you notice? No cuss words! Peace.

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  9. Reminds me of the TV commercial "ppppick up a penguin" with hundreds of them dancing in a bar!

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    1. Is Penguin the name of a beer over where you are? Never saw the commercial but it sounds fun. Thanks for stopping by.

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    2. Not beer: a chocolate biscuit sandwich that has diminished in size over the years.

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  10. Looks to me like the bartender doesn't need tips. This was fun. As usual. (Shakes her head, "he honked" he said, hahaha, funny guy)

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    1. Thank you Marie. I googled what sounds penguins make and one of them was honk, which actually gave me the idea for the story. I really loved your entry this weekend!

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    2. Your comment just made me honk!

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    3. I ran out of reply spaces on my blog but to answer your question about the 3 votes: yes please :)

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  11. Fun! Your surprising word choice makes this a delight to read.

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    1. Thanks Brenda. I always appreciate your comments.

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  12. Gah! Puns!
    Yep, you'll probably win this week.
    And deservedly so.

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  13. Thoroughly enjoyable. And that I think is a great work in itself.

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    1. Thanks Ruby. This means a lot as I really like your writing.

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  14. This is AWESOME! I love "penguined" as verb. I can totally see this.

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    1. Thank you De. I appreciate your comments!

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  15. This made me smile; it DOES sound like a classic joke. Excellent work!

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  16. Bravo lumdog! You really lumdogged this challenge.! :D

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    1. Thanks Linda. A new verb named after me! Woo woo, yay! ;)

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  17. LOVE IT!! I adore penguins, so this is an instant fav! :) So cute!

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    1. Thanks Renada. Penguins seem cute and silly to me so Harry the penguin was my only choice!

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  18. This had me cackling to myself, and now my husband is eyeing me with concern. I loved this!

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    1. TMW, thank you so much. As long as you don't start honking, you'll be ok!

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  19. Penguined....snort! This is fun and reminds me of a friend who calls themselves penguin and bellies up to the bar often.

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    1. Penguins have a habit of doing this! Thanks for your comments, Debbie.

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  20. Ha! Perhaps if he'd been wearing a tux, he would have been served. :) Very amusing entry - nice job!

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    1. Thanks Christine. Maybe he needed to be in a better class place!

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  21. Penguined. I love it. I'm really enjoying seeing the different animals we all use here.

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    1. Thanks ODNT. I liked this one a lot!

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