Friday, August 24, 2012

Bad Day at the Bar


Harry penguined his way to the bar and honked: “Tequila, leave the worm!”  The bartender says, “Hey, I don’t like your attitude and you walk funny. You’re on thin ice around here, buddy.”
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I wrote this for Trifextra Week 30 Writing Challenge, where we are supposed to write a 33 word composition using the name of an animal as a verb.

Your comments are welcome.


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  1. AnonymousAugust 24, 2012 at 12:26 PM

    Oh this is very funny. I think you did very well with the prompt. :-)

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  2. JeannaAugust 24, 2012 at 12:30 PM

    Coming from someone that has tended bar, I can visualize how he's walking to the bar. Good choice of verb!

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    1. lumdog2012August 24, 2012 at 1:08 PM

      Thanks Jeanna. Nothing worse than having to make drinks for a penguin with an attitude!

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  3. MOVAugust 24, 2012 at 1:45 PM

    ha! love this!

    best,
    MOV

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  4. GinaAugust 24, 2012 at 2:48 PM

    "Tequila. Hold the worm." for me. This reads like a great joke. Very clever and funny. Loved the "thin ice." and who doesn't love a bar hopping penguin? I was going to do a goose.

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    1. lumdog2012August 24, 2012 at 3:20 PM

      Thanks Gina. I loved doing this one. Yea, I was thinking about those old jokes where "the elephant walks into a bar...".

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  5. AnonymousAugust 24, 2012 at 4:46 PM

    hahaha...wish you had a few more words to figure out a way to use slide away

    awesome

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    1. lumdog2012August 24, 2012 at 7:17 PM

      Yea, it would have been another 33 words to work the polar bear into this! Thanks.

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  6. AnonymousAugust 24, 2012 at 4:48 PM

    Ha! I love that you used penguin as the verb.

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    1. lumdog2012August 24, 2012 at 7:20 PM

      Thanks. I enjoyed deciding which animal to write about!

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  7. UnknownAugust 24, 2012 at 6:58 PM

    Oh, perfect. I love the visual here.

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    1. lumdog2012August 24, 2012 at 7:25 PM

      Thanks. Yea, he's got to reach for that tequila!

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  8. AnonymousAugust 24, 2012 at 9:12 PM

    Hahahha! This was a good one. It reminds me of the kinds of jokes my uncle would tell at Thanksgiving dinners :)

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    1. lumdog2012August 25, 2012 at 4:20 AM

      Yea, I was reminded of my dad telling those jokes. Usually off color ;) Thanks for your comments Janna.

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  9. AnonymousAugust 24, 2012 at 9:49 PM

    Using "penguin" was brill. I can absolutely see the toddling drunk! Peace, Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/08/24/two-for-trifecta-animals-as-verbs/

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    1. lumdog2012August 25, 2012 at 4:24 AM

      Thanks Amy. I was working with the drunk angle but word limit skunked me. Did you notice? No cuss words! Peace.

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  10. vivinfranceAugust 25, 2012 at 1:51 AM

    Reminds me of the TV commercial "ppppick up a penguin" with hundreds of them dancing in a bar!

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    1. lumdog2012August 25, 2012 at 4:27 AM

      Is Penguin the name of a beer over where you are? Never saw the commercial but it sounds fun. Thanks for stopping by.

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    2. vivinfranceAugust 27, 2012 at 11:56 PM

      Not beer: a chocolate biscuit sandwich that has diminished in size over the years.

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  11. Marie NicoleAugust 25, 2012 at 8:22 AM

    Looks to me like the bartender doesn't need tips. This was fun. As usual. (Shakes her head, "he honked" he said, hahaha, funny guy)

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    1. lumdog2012August 25, 2012 at 9:53 AM

      Thank you Marie. I googled what sounds penguins make and one of them was honk, which actually gave me the idea for the story. I really loved your entry this weekend!

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    2. Marie NicoleAugust 25, 2012 at 10:13 AM

      Your comment just made me honk!

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    3. Marie NicoleAugust 25, 2012 at 3:46 PM

      I ran out of reply spaces on my blog but to answer your question about the 3 votes: yes please :)

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  12. AnonymousAugust 25, 2012 at 8:35 AM

    Fun! Your surprising word choice makes this a delight to read.

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    1. lumdog2012August 25, 2012 at 9:55 AM

      Thanks Brenda. I always appreciate your comments.

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  13. ElGuapoAugust 25, 2012 at 9:57 AM

    Gah! Puns!
    Yep, you'll probably win this week.
    And deservedly so.

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  14. Whispering ThoughtsAugust 25, 2012 at 9:58 AM

    Thoroughly enjoyable. And that I think is a great work in itself.

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    1. lumdog2012August 25, 2012 at 10:15 AM

      Thanks Ruby. This means a lot as I really like your writing.

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  15. De JacksonAugust 25, 2012 at 10:36 AM

    This is AWESOME! I love "penguined" as verb. I can totally see this.

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  16. R.L.W.August 25, 2012 at 1:53 PM

    This made me smile; it DOES sound like a classic joke. Excellent work!

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  17. AnonymousAugust 25, 2012 at 5:29 PM

    Bravo lumdog! You really lumdogged this challenge.! :D

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    1. lumdog2012August 26, 2012 at 3:38 AM

      Thanks Linda. A new verb named after me! Woo woo, yay! ;)

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  18. AnonymousAugust 26, 2012 at 5:06 AM

    LOVE IT!! I adore penguins, so this is an instant fav! :) So cute!

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    1. lumdog2012August 26, 2012 at 5:08 AM

      Thanks Renada. Penguins seem cute and silly to me so Harry the penguin was my only choice!

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  19. TMWHickmanAugust 26, 2012 at 7:12 AM

    This had me cackling to myself, and now my husband is eyeing me with concern. I loved this!

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    1. lumdog2012August 26, 2012 at 7:40 AM

      TMW, thank you so much. As long as you don't start honking, you'll be ok!

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  20. AnonymousAugust 26, 2012 at 12:42 PM

    Penguined....snort! This is fun and reminds me of a friend who calls themselves penguin and bellies up to the bar often.

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    1. lumdog2012August 26, 2012 at 2:00 PM

      Penguins have a habit of doing this! Thanks for your comments, Debbie.

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  21. AnonymousAugust 26, 2012 at 2:30 PM

    Ha! Perhaps if he'd been wearing a tux, he would have been served. :) Very amusing entry - nice job!

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    1. lumdog2012August 26, 2012 at 4:09 PM

      Thanks Christine. Maybe he needed to be in a better class place!

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  22. AnonymousAugust 26, 2012 at 2:56 PM

    Penguined. I love it. I'm really enjoying seeing the different animals we all use here.

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