Wednesday, March 6, 2013

Gravity

One ball soars
Then two, then three
When they drop
We ask why
But gravity dictates
It always does

We juggle  
through our lives
The kids, the job, the laundry, our friends and loves
We make choices
But gravity dictates
It always does
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I wrote this for the Week 67 Trifecta Writing Challenge where we are to write 33-333 words using the word “juggle” in the context of handling or dealing with several things at one time.

Your comments are appreciated.

 

 

31 comments:

  1. That's a grave observation.

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    1. Thanks Bee. I was gravely serious when I wrote it!

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  2. It sure decides what floats to the top! I liked the simplicity of this, lumdog. I spend a lot of time thinking about choices and how making one precludes all others. That's life and it's a challenge at times.

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    1. Thanks Gina. Glad you liked it. I was thinking about those choices and how we sometimes choose "things" over people and "friends" over loved ones.

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  3. Very much like the refrain -- it's so true.

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  4. A great take on the prompt.
    It captures our hectic lives so well. We make choices but with so many balls in the air we're never going to stop some crashing to the ground. Often it's the ones we take our eyes off. Too busy at work and the next thing part of family life has fallen.

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  5. Thank you MJ. I was really focused on that family thing.

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  6. Yes, not good to drop the ball, whatever you may be juggling. I haven't thought of it that way, but life is a constant struggle to stay upright in whatever takes place.

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    1. I think so too. But sometimes, people, including me, make some poor choices. Thanks Ted.

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  7. I enjoy your poetic offerings. Gravity dictates.. it sure does. Communicated a life lesson in two short stanzas. Well thought out, and I like the repetition.

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    1. Steph, thank you for your kind words. I feel awkward about your comment on the poetry since I feel like it's just not my thing.

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  8. I like this! Gravity is the great equalizer-a reminder for us to choose wisely when we decide what, and who, to juggle. Well done-and well written!

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    1. Valerie, thanks for putting my awkward poem into such clear words.

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  9. I like how you expressed this. It's inevitable that balls will drop (thanks, gravity) but it's up to us to be attentive enough to retrieve them quickly.

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    1. Thanks Janna. So true, but I was also thinking about priorities. Maybe we should let one of those balls drop to prevent the others from crashing down.

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  10. Terrific piece, lumdog! Your insistence on gravity makes me reflect on the amount of time we often put into agonizing over things that are often decided by something as simple, obvious and inevitable as gravity.
    My, you seem to have let out my philosophy hot air balloon this morning!

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    1. Thanks kymm. I feel awkward when I get philosphical too, which is not normally my thing. I'm glad you liked it.

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  12. Yes,its true-like the way you compared the choices/roles in life with a juggler's ball(s).We juggle all these while walking a tightrope-balancing all the time but even if gravity does get one of the balls,its imperative we keep our eyes on the others & try to pick up the fallen one too-a tough call!:-)

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    1. Thanks so much Atreyee. I think the choices we make about what's important to us are the driving factor.

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  13. Apologies for the earlier comment from "Alura",Lumdog-thts my daughter-she had logged in from my laptop & had forgotten to log off-I did not realise till I posted my comment-so went back,logged off & then logged back in=-phew!

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    1. No problem. Alura is welcome to comment any time. :)

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  14. Well done... you beautifully put into words what I was trying to convey!

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  15. Yes, gravity, annoying property sometimes.

    Well written! I can relate completely.

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  16. I agree with Steph, I believe, who praised your poetry. You do it well, whether you believe that or not, my friend. I enjoy the balanced structure to thisparticular piece. I, also, like how you dressed a profound issue in everyday clothes to soften its' edges and weight. :)

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  17. Yeah, gravity's a real downer, grounding us to reality all the time (: Awesome piece.

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  18. Sadly I do not analyse as I should, I simply write. I feel often stupid or possibly not as uneducated for not looking more deeply into words that are written. All I say is what I feel and that is I liked the repetitiveness in the last two lines of each stanza. Yes lives are juggled as are balls and gravity 'it seems' dictates what is the most important. I apologise for having nothing more.

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  19. I love the way you so directly compare juggling balls with juggling life. So powerful and so true.

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