Wednesday, September 19, 2012

Ritual

I move the hair off your neck
And I slowly run my hand down your back
All the way down to the soles of your feet

I work my way back up your ample body
with my kisses,
stopping at each special place

I never tire of this ritual
and the lovely dance we perform
and the little noises you make

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I wrote this for the Trifecta Week 43 Writing Challenge where we are supposed to write a compositon using the word, "ample", in the context of a person's figure.

Your comments are appreciated.




30 comments:

  1. Ooh! Wow. Nice one Lum. I could totally visualize it the whole way...

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    1. Thanks Marie. It was fun=exciting recreating these moments. Btw, I think I'm using the = sign because I'm channeling your stuf! ;)

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  2. Okay, Lumdog!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I got the context! This was waaaaay HOT!

    Hope that didn't embarrass you. Did it? It is absolutely fantastic because as I read, so few words, I was totally engrossed in the imagery. Am I being creepy? Don't mean to be but it was really, really good. And different!

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  3. No problem here. I was trying to convey some, very hot, moments where two people are physically and emotionally intertwined.

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    1. Mea culpa, I forgot to say say thank you for your kind and enthusiastic words!

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  4. A lovely sexy praise piece on the fuller figure usually derided

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    1. Thank you Viv. I guess I am in the camp of men who like a woman with some "meat on her bones".

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  5. Voluptuous... nicely put. (RogRites)

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  6. What a powerful scene you've painted in a very short few words! I could picture all of it. Excellent work!

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  7. Great descriptions. I felt like I was right there. Thank goodness you stopped where you did or I would've had to turn my head away :)

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    1. That's funny because I was wondering, as I was writing, how far I was going to go with this!

      Janna, thank you for those comments.

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  8. The eroticism here is wonderful. The little noises are especially telling. YUM.

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    1. Thank you Jessie! I appreciate that you noticed the "little noises"; they are a big part of this ritual! ;)

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  9. Lumdog, I think I'm developing a little crush on you :) This was fantastic!

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  10. There's a sweetness to this in addition to the sex appeal; connection and not just lust. Nicely done.

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    1. Annabelle, thank you for noticing that. There is a strong emotional connection between these two.

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  11. Wow! That's one sexy little morsel of writing right there!

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  12. sensual yet sweet. 'ample' certainly has an appeal in this piece.

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    1. Thanks Renada. You are right. I am using the word "ample" in a complimentary way.

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  13. Wow, you laid it all out there. Thanks for sharing! Be sure to come on back soon.

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  14. this was a favorite of mine and although it was hot and sexy, my favorite line was the last, "the little noises you make", because it tells me that this woman, this object of your affection is so much more than that, you see and HEAR her..you enjoy the little things about her.

    this one....very very nice.

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    1. Yes. The little noises are a big deal to me. Thank you so much Kir.

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