Friday, February 15, 2013

The Cure

I’m on a high wire;

I might fall into the abyss

My head spins, my heart stops and my stomach flops

I’m a train wreck…

Does this Xanax stuff really work?.....For hyperbole?
 
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I wrote this for the Trifextra Week 55 Writing Challenge where we are to write 33 words using hyperbole.
 
Your comments are appreciated.

 

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44 comments:

  1. AnonymousFebruary 15, 2013 at 10:46 AM

    That is a lot for one little pill to fix! Nicely written.

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  2. ReneeFebruary 15, 2013 at 10:57 AM

    Hmmm, maybe lithium?

    Nice job with the prompt!

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    1. lumdog2012February 15, 2013 at 11:39 AM

      I assume that's a stronger one? Maybe, that's the trick! Thanks Renee.

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  3. GinaFebruary 15, 2013 at 11:31 AM

    I've never had one but if all that's going on, I'd take two. But what do I know? Fun lumdog!

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    1. lumdog2012February 15, 2013 at 11:43 AM

      Yeah, maybe. Like you, I never had one.

      But the bigger problem is the cure for overuse of hyperbole. Maybe an intensive writing class? :)

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    2. lumdog2012February 15, 2013 at 12:08 PM

      Where are my manners. Thanks for your comments Gina!

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  4. tedstrutzFebruary 15, 2013 at 12:34 PM

    I don't think so...

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  5. AnonymousFebruary 15, 2013 at 1:39 PM

    none of my pills work for hyperbole. It's the worst thing in the world.

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    1. lumdog2012February 15, 2013 at 1:43 PM

      Yeah, fun to play with but deadly in when actually used in writing. Thanks for "getting" it.

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  6. lumdog2012February 15, 2013 at 1:41 PM

    Thank you Bo.

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  7. Tara R.February 15, 2013 at 3:06 PM

    Let me know how that works for ya, I might need to check it out too.

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  8. AnonymousFebruary 15, 2013 at 7:46 PM

    Excellent!!! It's no secret, I'm prescribed xanex. You'll need something stronger. :) lol. This was very good!

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  9. AnonymousFebruary 16, 2013 at 2:46 AM

    There will 'hyper' posts and calming ones, I liked your version LD.

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    1. lumdog2012February 16, 2013 at 10:32 AM

      Thank you. I appear calm on the outside, but I'm pretty hyper. But not as bad as my character! :)

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  10. Sandra CrookFebruary 16, 2013 at 5:04 AM

    Let me know if it does. :) Nice one.

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  11. DraugFebruary 16, 2013 at 6:21 AM

    I guess we'll know if it works if you win again this weekend (:

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    1. lumdog2012February 16, 2013 at 10:38 AM

      I'll take five, then I'll see if I can avoid falling off the cliff! Thanks Draug.

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  12. Dawn :)February 16, 2013 at 7:31 AM

    Train wreck + Xanex = ? ... Tune in next week for the exciting (zonked out?) conclusion! Cute entry, well done :)

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    1. lumdog2012February 16, 2013 at 7:40 AM

      Maybe my character won't use hyperbole so excessively if he's zonked out. Great suggestion! :)

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  13. kymmFebruary 16, 2013 at 8:11 AM

    PILLS CURE NOTHING!!! AND THERE IS NO CURE FOR HYPERBOLE!!!
    (I'm on a hyperbole as CAPS rampage, sorry)
    Excellent take, lumdog!

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    1. lumdog2012February 16, 2013 at 10:43 AM

      HA HA!! Thanks. I needed someone to yell and slap me senseless! Ah...my character, that is! ;) Thanks Kymm.

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  14. AnonymousFebruary 16, 2013 at 8:56 AM

    Ha! This is great! Love the train wreck imagery. Also, if the makers of Xanax get wind of this I'm sure hyperbole will be listed as one of the things it can fix. ;)

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    1. lumdog2012February 16, 2013 at 10:45 AM

      I will be expecting a commission if that happens. Thanks Suzanne. :)

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  15. chamblee54February 16, 2013 at 10:19 AM

    Xanax only works for low perbole.

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    1. lumdog2012February 16, 2013 at 10:46 AM

      Thanks for that insight. Now, on to find a cure for puns! ;)

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  16. AnonymousFebruary 16, 2013 at 2:51 PM

    nah, my pills make hyperbole worse...lol

    I liked this.

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    1. lumdog2012February 16, 2013 at 3:06 PM

      Thanks Lance. Yeah, I can see how that could happen.

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  17. TMWHickmanFebruary 16, 2013 at 9:36 PM

    I think that you did a great job with the hyperbole, as long as you didn't drive or operate heavy machinery.

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    1. lumdog2012February 17, 2013 at 4:24 AM

      Thank you Tina. I'll remember that. I hope my computer isn't considered heavy machinery! ;)

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  18. AnonymousFebruary 17, 2013 at 6:49 AM

    maybe a handful :) good one ^^

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  19. ElGuapoFebruary 17, 2013 at 7:45 AM

    Sleep is the cure for hyperbole. Plus you'll wake up feeling like a million bucks.

    (So watch out for the antlers.)

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    1. lumdog2012February 17, 2013 at 8:20 AM

      Thanks Guap. Never thought of sleep as a cure for over the top writing but I won't buck your advice. If there were only a cure for puns! :)

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  20. UnknownFebruary 17, 2013 at 9:12 AM

    The cure for puns is pun-ishment.

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  21. AtreyeeFebruary 17, 2013 at 10:54 AM

    What a great piece of writing-loved it:-)

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  22. AnonymousFebruary 17, 2013 at 4:53 PM

    Ha! We need a pill for everything don't we. Like the wit and sarcasm.

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  23. vivinfranceFebruary 18, 2013 at 2:41 AM

    Love it.

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