Friday, February 15, 2013

The Cure

I’m on a high wire;

I might fall into the abyss

My head spins, my heart stops and my stomach flops

I’m a train wreck…

Does this Xanax stuff really work?.....For hyperbole?
 
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I wrote this for the Trifextra Week 55 Writing Challenge where we are to write 33 words using hyperbole.
 
Your comments are appreciated.

 

45 comments:

  1. That is a lot for one little pill to fix! Nicely written.

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  2. Hmmm, maybe lithium?

    Nice job with the prompt!

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    1. I assume that's a stronger one? Maybe, that's the trick! Thanks Renee.

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  3. I've never had one but if all that's going on, I'd take two. But what do I know? Fun lumdog!

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    1. Yeah, maybe. Like you, I never had one.

      But the bigger problem is the cure for overuse of hyperbole. Maybe an intensive writing class? :)

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    2. Where are my manners. Thanks for your comments Gina!

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  4. none of my pills work for hyperbole. It's the worst thing in the world.

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    1. Yeah, fun to play with but deadly in when actually used in writing. Thanks for "getting" it.

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  5. Let me know how that works for ya, I might need to check it out too.

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  6. Excellent!!! It's no secret, I'm prescribed xanex. You'll need something stronger. :) lol. This was very good!

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  7. There will 'hyper' posts and calming ones, I liked your version LD.

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    1. Thank you. I appear calm on the outside, but I'm pretty hyper. But not as bad as my character! :)

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  8. Let me know if it does. :) Nice one.

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  9. I guess we'll know if it works if you win again this weekend (:

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    1. I'll take five, then I'll see if I can avoid falling off the cliff! Thanks Draug.

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  10. Train wreck + Xanex = ? ... Tune in next week for the exciting (zonked out?) conclusion! Cute entry, well done :)

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    1. Maybe my character won't use hyperbole so excessively if he's zonked out. Great suggestion! :)

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  11. PILLS CURE NOTHING!!! AND THERE IS NO CURE FOR HYPERBOLE!!!
    (I'm on a hyperbole as CAPS rampage, sorry)
    Excellent take, lumdog!

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    1. HA HA!! Thanks. I needed someone to yell and slap me senseless! Ah...my character, that is! ;) Thanks Kymm.

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  12. Ha! This is great! Love the train wreck imagery. Also, if the makers of Xanax get wind of this I'm sure hyperbole will be listed as one of the things it can fix. ;)

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    1. I will be expecting a commission if that happens. Thanks Suzanne. :)

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    1. Thanks for that insight. Now, on to find a cure for puns! ;)

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  14. nah, my pills make hyperbole worse...lol

    I liked this.

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    1. Thanks Lance. Yeah, I can see how that could happen.

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  15. I think that you did a great job with the hyperbole, as long as you didn't drive or operate heavy machinery.

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    1. Thank you Tina. I'll remember that. I hope my computer isn't considered heavy machinery! ;)

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  16. Sleep is the cure for hyperbole. Plus you'll wake up feeling like a million bucks.

    (So watch out for the antlers.)

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    1. Thanks Guap. Never thought of sleep as a cure for over the top writing but I won't buck your advice. If there were only a cure for puns! :)

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  17. The cure for puns is pun-ishment.

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    1. I'll take what's coming to me. Thanks Sam.

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  18. What a great piece of writing-loved it:-)

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  19. Ha! We need a pill for everything don't we. Like the wit and sarcasm.

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