The
bed moaned under our weight and my screaming alarm clock radio began to spit
out useless information. Suddenly, the door yawned and my clever dog, Raton,
strolled in to assess the commotion. ________
I
wrote this for the Week 52 Trifextra Writing Challenge where we are to write 33
words using personification, where human traits and characteristics are given
to animals and inanimate objects.
hey there! It's mah birfday . . . and hubbymoose pulled YOUR name from the hat . . . could you send me your mailing address? prplmoose@kenaiwriter.net will get it to me. I will pop a surprise into the mail this week. :)
My dog licks my hand that's draped over the edge. I appreciate the entire visual description here. I don't like to be woken up and more strongly dislike the commotion. Pillow placed firmly over head.
Well done, master lumdog. I love that your dog is named Raton - is he little like a rat or just looks like one? Or is he a figment of your imagination? This is terrific!
I'm counting six personifications here! Did I miss any? Very good!
ReplyDeleteThanks Joe. I wasn't sure whether clever dog qualified. If so, then it's seven, but who's counting lol!
DeleteWow. Love each word equally! Everything's alive!!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Linda. I hadn't thought of it that way but alive is good! ;)
Deleteasses the commotion..what a great way to personify those morning rituals.
ReplyDeleteI loved all the sights and sounds.
MORNING :)
Thanks Kir. I guess I described a pretty hectic morning. It was fun writing this. Thanks Kir.
Delete*puts a pillow over her head* Definitely sensing the Get Up Now quality of the surroundings!
ReplyDeleteThanks Dawn. Glad you liked the urgency.
DeleteVery cool. I had a hard time picking one object and you picked a whole ton.
ReplyDeleteYeah, before I even cooked up the story, I was thinking how many personifications I could come up with. Thanks Jennifer.
DeleteExcellent post Lumdog-loved the door yawning-I saw my window gape at that;-)
ReplyDeleteI love that your window gapes. Lol! Thank you Atreyee! ;)
DeleteOy, I prefer my mornings a bit less intense! Less personality, I guess.
ReplyDeleteSame here! At least the dog wasn't barking! Thanks Kymm.
DeleteSeems like you had fun with this one! That makes it fun for the reader, as a result. Thanks for such an enjoyable read. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Tom. I did have fun writing this.
Deletegot a lot going on in in 33 words mirroring the morning - good use of the prompt - my bed moans too....
ReplyDeleteThank you Steven
Deleteand the assessment of the dog? :) perfect
ReplyDeleteThanks Barbara. :)
Deletehey there! It's mah birfday . . . and hubbymoose pulled YOUR name from the hat . . . could you send me your mailing address? prplmoose@kenaiwriter.net will get it to me. I will pop a surprise into the mail this week. :)
DeleteOh, mornings like that make me want to pull the covers over my head :)
ReplyDeleteYeah, they are the worst. Thanks Janna.
DeleteI see I'm not the only one with a nosy pup! Way to impressively work several examples into such a tight space.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! :)
DeleteUgh alarm clocks. Spitting is such a fitting description of them.
ReplyDeleteI was happy when I came up with that word. Thanks Draug.
DeleteThat's exactly what big dogs do! They stroll in and assess. Is the dog big? I pictured a big dog.
ReplyDeleteHa! Sorry, no dog. Thanks Kristin.
DeleteThis sounds like morning at my house. Wonderful visuals! Great take on the prompt!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Suzanne. :)
DeleteMy dog licks my hand that's draped over the edge. I appreciate the entire visual description here. I don't like to be woken up and more strongly dislike the commotion. Pillow placed firmly over head.
ReplyDeleteThanks Gina. I was writing this from memory. No dog, no noise, no alarm. I wake up early on my own. :/ glad you liked the descriptions though.
DeleteWow, you took the prompt and ran with it! Brilliantly, I might add.
ReplyDeleteTina, thank you for your kind words.
DeleteTerrific descriptions!
ReplyDeleteThank you Bo!
DeleteWell done, master lumdog. I love that your dog is named Raton - is he little like a rat or just looks like one? Or is he a figment of your imagination? This is terrific!
ReplyDeleteHe's a figment. But he's small like a rat, in my imagination. Thanks Steph.
DeleteWow. Talk about personifying things. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much.
DeleteOk you've out-done us all! Six whoppers! Loved it.
ReplyDeleteThank you Gretchen. I enjoyed your entry, especially the photo.
DeleteWell done! I was struggling for one.
ReplyDeleteThanks Renee.
DeleteYou made this busy and intimate in just 33 words. *fist bump* lum
ReplyDeleteI appreciate that you always leave such thoughtful comments. Thank Lance.
DeleteCute. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks. ;)
DeleteOh how I hate a screaming alarm clock, but a good dog entering the scene is so welcomed. A great take on the worst time of the day. :D
ReplyDeleteDebbie@ www.debbiesdays.wordpress.com
Thank you Debbie. Yeah, I hate getting up even though I don't use an alarm clock anymore.
Deletehaha moaning and screaming huh? love it!
ReplyDeleteThank you Kim.
DeleteThis reminded me of something I haven't used in eons: alarm clocks. Now I need to forget about those intrusive objects of the devil! ;)
ReplyDeleteThanks Marie. I don't use them either but they are an unpleasant memory.
DeleteHa! Great way to use the prompt to illustrate a typical morning.
ReplyDeleteThanks Christine. Loved your piece.
DeleteExcellently written!
ReplyDeleteWow! Thank you Amelia.
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