Newbie: “No, I don’t think so. What club?
OT: “Jeez man, don’t you know anything? If you want to make it in this town, you got to be in the club.”
N: “Well, who’s in the club?”
OT: “Anybody who is anybody.”
N: O.k., but what does the club do?”
OT: “Ahh…what do you mean, ‘do’”?
N: “Like, what activities to you do? Do you raise money for sick kids, sing to people in the hospital, the usual stuff?”
OT: “Well not exactly, we mainly just sit around
and hang out.”
N: "If I'm understanding you correctly, you're telling me you don't do anything?”
OT: “Well…shit, that would require work, we just
like to drink a lot and smoke cigars.”
N: “So, it’s really just about being able to say
that you hang with the cool people.”
OT: “Yeah, well…now that you put it that way,
that’s pretty much it.”
N: Ok, how do I get in?”
I wrote this for the
Week 82 Trifecta Writing Challenge where we are to write a 33-333 word composition
using the word “club” in the context of an association of persons.
Your comments are appreciated.
Oh yeah, well done. That's what it's all about. Made me laugh. Groucho Marx said it best: I wouldn't want to be part of a club that would have me as a member. :)
ReplyDeleteHaha! I should have worked that line in there. Thanks for reminding me of it and your comment Steph. :)
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ReplyDeleteOT: “Ahh…what do you mean, ‘do’”? Funniest line!
Yeah , OT is a little single minded. Thanks Pirate.
DeleteThis is great. It's all about hanging with the cool people. :)
ReplyDeleteI have to agree with you Donetta. This is so simple and true. Great job Lumdog.
DeleteThanks Donetta. Sad thing is that it there are people like this.
DeleteThank you Bill. I was afraid I made this too simple but I guess I wanted to show the stark reality of these situations.
DeleteGood. That didn't end the way I thought it would.
ReplyDeleteThanks Ted. I'm glad I fooled you. I didn't know what the guy was going to do either until my fingers hit the keyboard. :)
ReplyDeleteExcellent! I was expecting him to walk away and not be interested!
ReplyDeleteThanks Freya. I was tempted to go with that ending, but I try to write what (I think) is reality and I think many people are drawn into these things, for the wrong reasons (me included).
Deletefor some reason I had the OT speaking with a brooklyn accent in my head :-) you in or out buddy? I like where you took the prompt
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Thank you Steven. I've been immersed in the Brooklyn culture and I live and do business in the south. I think it's the same club! :) Btw, I enjoyed re-reading with Brooklyn accent.
DeleteThat sounds like the kind of club a group of young kids would come up with. (:
ReplyDeleteGrown ups do a lot of childish things, I think. Thanks Draug.
DeleteA thought-provoking read. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteThank you Misky.
DeleteLove the title, lumdog!
ReplyDeleteWell, this is just one more club my alterego for this week is not going to be asked to join. hahaha
Kymm, thanks fo noticing the title. This is not a club you need to be in. :)
DeleteIt is all about the beer, really. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks tina. :)
DeleteThat Groucho Marx line was the first thing I thought of, too.
ReplyDeleteI like the last two lines the best. good piece, funny and poignant.
Thanks Lance. You got exactly what I was trying to say, but I wasn't sure I really got there.
DeleteReally enjoyed reading, especially "OT: “Well…shit, that would require work,..". This sounds like a great club to be a member of.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed writing that line. Too real, actually. Thanks Sarah.
DeleteYup. Sounds like a lot of clubs I've known. Where can I fins this club? Hehe. Very entertaining and amusing.
ReplyDeleteThank you Leftwoods. Appreciate your comments. :) Are you in Triecta this week? May have missed it.
DeleteLove the end... yes that's the nature of most clubs.. nailed well
ReplyDeleteThanks Bjorn. I think it's pretty common.
Deleteyou know what's interesting and slightly sad...that with the death of Jim Gandalfini this week, my first thought was the way old Italian made men sit and smoke and shoot the shit all day long like it is work.
ReplyDeleteI saw a smoky back room...and Tony Soprano leading the pack.
Missed ya...so glad you're back.
You hit the nail on the head. Usually dark, cheap wood paneled rooms with faux leather chairs. I met Mr G while he was filming at the Bada Bing. A truly nice man. Btw, the Bada Bibg is a real strip club in NJ with a different name.
DeleteLove this! "OK, how to I get in?"
ReplyDeleteSounds like too many people I know.
Yeah, exactly. Thanks Renee. :)
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