Friday, July 19, 2013

Untimely News

Just heard my friend, Joe, died…can’t take the news at this stage. Walk into a bar. “Jack, no water.” My phone lights up…shit, it’s Joe calling! I owe him $150.  Let it ring.
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I wrote this for the Week 77 Trifextra Writing Challenge where we are to write a 33 word composition using the words “ring”, “water” and “stage”.

Your comments are appreciated.   

34 comments:

  1. Too many Joes's, not enough time.

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    1. And not enough money. Thanks Jennifer. :)

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  2. I'm sure to find a laugh here! Good one, lum

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    1. Thanks Gina. Glad to see you back. :)

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  3. Joe always did have terrible timing...

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    1. Joe is downright inconsiderate. Thanks Tina. :)

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  4. Haha! Joe probably has resolved to not die until he gets his money. :) Very funny and creative use of the three words. I enjoyed reading it.

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    1. Thanks so much Ivy. I think Joe can be very spiteful.

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  5. Jack might just be the new best friend now;) This was such a kick, lum! Thanks for making me laugh!

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    1. Thanks Valerie. Yeah, my characters like Jack. :)

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  6. I don't get it! But the shift in moods flows very well for only having 33 words to work with :)

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    1. Sorry, I know this is choppy. He "heard" his friend died, but this was apparently not true. Thanks for commenting Yve. :)

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  7. When I was a bartender, we had an amazing number of people that drank beam with water. This is too funny. Glad he was relieved his friend was alive. :)

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    1. Thanks. Donetta. I drink Maker's on ice. :)

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  8. Haha...too funny! I wouldn't take a call from a dead guy- especially one I owed money.

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    1. Haha! Thanks Janna. I was actually friended on FB by somebody who died. I didn't owe her money though but I haven't accepted either!

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  9. Humorous.. An enjoyable read! :-)

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  10. Well, Joe can't take it with him when he goes. Funny...

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  11. Haha! Now that's what I'm talkin' about! :D

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  12. wasn't it Twain who said something about the news of his death being untrue? (bastardized THAT quote, didn't I?) Durn Joe had to call just when he was ready to be toasted. :) Good one, Lum!

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  13. Debt and death ... no repayment of debt after death ... Better die after the repayment ! Funny :D

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  14. Better pay back a ghost! He'll haunt your ass, answered phone or not! Yours made me laugh :)

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  15. Use the money for Jack, Joe can wait! Thank you for linking up :). ~Mary Beth

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  16. A call from beyond the grave? I'd change numbers quick!
    Thank you for linking up!

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    1. Yeah, long distance charges can be steep. Thanks Tri.

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