Just
heard my friend, Joe, died…can’t take the news at this stage. Walk into a bar.
“Jack, no water.” My phone lights up…shit, it’s Joe calling! I owe him
$150.Let it ring. ________
I wrote this for the
Week 77 Trifextra Writing Challenge where we are to write a 33 word composition
using the words “ring”, “water” and “stage”.
When I was a bartender, we had an amazing number of people that drank beam with water. This is too funny. Glad he was relieved his friend was alive. :)
wasn't it Twain who said something about the news of his death being untrue? (bastardized THAT quote, didn't I?) Durn Joe had to call just when he was ready to be toasted. :) Good one, Lum!
Oops! That made me chuckle.
ReplyDeleteThanks Morgan. :)
DeleteToo many Joes's, not enough time.
ReplyDeleteAnd not enough money. Thanks Jennifer. :)
DeleteI'm sure to find a laugh here! Good one, lum
ReplyDeleteThanks Gina. Glad to see you back. :)
DeleteJoe always did have terrible timing...
ReplyDeleteJoe is downright inconsiderate. Thanks Tina. :)
DeleteHaha! Joe probably has resolved to not die until he gets his money. :) Very funny and creative use of the three words. I enjoyed reading it.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Ivy. I think Joe can be very spiteful.
DeleteJack might just be the new best friend now;) This was such a kick, lum! Thanks for making me laugh!
ReplyDeleteThanks Valerie. Yeah, my characters like Jack. :)
DeleteThis is funny. Great work.
ReplyDeleteThanks Draug. :)
DeleteI don't get it! But the shift in moods flows very well for only having 33 words to work with :)
ReplyDeleteSorry, I know this is choppy. He "heard" his friend died, but this was apparently not true. Thanks for commenting Yve. :)
DeleteWhen I was a bartender, we had an amazing number of people that drank beam with water. This is too funny. Glad he was relieved his friend was alive. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks. Donetta. I drink Maker's on ice. :)
DeleteHaha...too funny! I wouldn't take a call from a dead guy- especially one I owed money.
ReplyDeleteHaha! Thanks Janna. I was actually friended on FB by somebody who died. I didn't owe her money though but I haven't accepted either!
DeleteHumorous.. An enjoyable read! :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you HA. :)
DeleteGood one :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Aesop. :)
DeleteWell, Joe can't take it with him when he goes. Funny...
ReplyDeleteMade me chuckle!
ReplyDeleteHaha! Now that's what I'm talkin' about! :D
ReplyDeletewasn't it Twain who said something about the news of his death being untrue? (bastardized THAT quote, didn't I?) Durn Joe had to call just when he was ready to be toasted. :) Good one, Lum!
ReplyDeleteDebt and death ... no repayment of debt after death ... Better die after the repayment ! Funny :D
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ReplyDeleteBetter pay back a ghost! He'll haunt your ass, answered phone or not! Yours made me laugh :)
Use the money for Jack, Joe can wait! Thank you for linking up :). ~Mary Beth
ReplyDeleteHa! Very good.
ReplyDeleteA call from beyond the grave? I'd change numbers quick!
ReplyDeleteThank you for linking up!
Yeah, long distance charges can be steep. Thanks Tri.
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